This is fascinating. I particularly appreciate the switch of point of view as we explore the different characters (maybe something learned by reading DU Bois' The Comet? :) The story wraps up well, and although there is surely more to say and do in this world, the looping structure gives it depth. Now, what this needs is more visual design: Lets take a break during class to help you solve the image issue, the error with the alignment macro, and remove the "back" arrow. Also, if you return to this, definitely consider more art and better styling. My two cents
this is super interesting so far! i'm excited to see the rest of the story! also, your picture at the beginning doesn't show- make sure when uploading a game with images you have: a folder on your desktop, in that folder have an "Images" folder, put your images in there, reink any images in your game to that Images folder, then save your game in that main folder on your desktop, zip it, then upload it!
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Very interesting!, I really liked the way everything was written.
Its unfortunate that the picture doesn't work.
This is fascinating. I particularly appreciate the switch of point of view as we explore the different characters (maybe something learned by reading DU Bois' The Comet? :) The story wraps up well, and although there is surely more to say and do in this world, the looping structure gives it depth. Now, what this needs is more visual design: Lets take a break during class to help you solve the image issue, the error with the alignment macro, and remove the "back" arrow. Also, if you return to this, definitely consider more art and better styling. My two cents
this is super interesting so far! i'm excited to see the rest of the story! also, your picture at the beginning doesn't show- make sure when uploading a game with images you have: a folder on your desktop, in that folder have an "Images" folder, put your images in there, reink any images in your game to that Images folder, then save your game in that main folder on your desktop, zip it, then upload it!